Tactical Jutsu

Yasuo Amano · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 2:41 pm Post subject:

Really? I suppose you've seen my reasoning for putting it down as a B kin. Hmm, what would suggest I change to keep the rank?
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Masakado · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 4:30 pm Post subject:

Yasuo Amano · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 5:29 pm Post subject:

Masa, please back off, you're not helping my app.
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Velidina_Shiatamme · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 9:00 pm Post subject:

I think the part that the user has full control in either enviroment; I think s/he should have some limitations on movement. My first idea would be the user could move between the real world and the genjutsu, but only be in one at a time. So while he was in the Genjutsu, his body in the real world would stop moving, and if he was visible in the Genjutsu and had to move back, he'd appear not moving as well.
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OzanaruSyra · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 10:32 pm Post subject:

TheGreatWarMage · Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 11:37 pm Post subject:

I would suggest a distance amount. If you can only move 15 meteres (as example) away from target then that helps keep it B rank.

They can move in the genjutsu, meaning they can dodge the chains, though unlikely can help keep it B rank. Can always create more chains in the genjutsu, though if they dodge it enough they can get out perhaps? Plus makes it more, interesting to RP.

Moving in only one world, though that would destroy the whole point of the jutsu it seems.

Would remove equal rank from unconsciousness, just have it as shocking fear. This would cause a person to be unable to move for...2 posts lets say, maybe more. Depending on the person i guess? Though same effects can be made on higher ranks...just not as long a shock?

Just adding 2 of the above would seem fair for keeping a B rank.
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Yasuo Amano · Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:26 am Post subject:

Hmm, yes the point of the jutsu is to take an opponent out of the fight quickly.
Hmm how about if I replaced the extreme effects of being caught in the jutsu with something less so... Maybe extreme fatigue? Though I still think it should at least knock out an rpc of two ranks lower.
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Masakado · Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 9:35 am Post subject:

There is also the matter of an auto cast. This doesn't seem to require hand seals nor does it account for the fact genjutsus require focus. This almost feels like you do what ever you do to initiate your genjutsu and then it works. When you write a genjutsu you should account for all your actions. This includes regular ninjutsu and advanced ninjutsu as well.

A genjutsu is keen on application, action, and potential.

The method of your application is non-existent. I suggest that you describe how it is applied, decrease the complexity, and account for potential after-effects.

What do I mean by complexity? Your genjutsu requires more skill than your allotting it. Simply restricting the movements of your opponent via illusion and being able to move while doing so is A-ranked. You not only do that, but your jutsu also causes mental and physical stress to the victims body. That bumps your jutsu up to S-rank easy.

The illusion you have created is also very elaborate, which causes more focus to be put into your genjutsu. To keep that world you have described, I suggest you have to stay in position into the chains are secured around the person.
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Yasuo Amano · Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 10:12 am Post subject: