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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:52 am Post subject: Erina Kousetsu, Snowing in the desert. |
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Name: Erina Kousetsu
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Height: 4'7
Weight: 81 lbs
Appearance:
Erina is a slight girl, pale skinned, with distinctive yellow-brown eyes. With her complexion, living in Suna, she usually sports reddish sunburned cheeks. She favors loose clothing, wearing reds and purples when she is home, or blacks when stealth is required. She usually wears clothing with hoods, to allow her to cover her distinctive, shock white hair, and keep most her skin out of the sun. Physically she isn't imposing, even for a girl her age, being slightly frail, and none too tall. Her petite frame hides a startling swiftness and flexibility, however.
Race: Caucasian
Hair: White
Eyes: Amber
Body: She has a very slender body, and is very nearly albino. She has very delicate, precise hands.
Ethnicity: Born in Sunagakure. Her father was a missing nin of Kirigakure, whom was captured and returned to his homeland, and subsequently executed, while her mother was a native of Sunagakure.
Personality: Erina was always a curious girl, in all senses of the word. She was constantly reading, and exploring, sometimes poking her head in places where it really didn't belong. She is very level headed, it is extremely rare for anything to crack her composure. She is fairly outspoken in her dislike of the heat, and is very fond of nighttime air, especially when the moon is full, casting enough light to see by. She is friendly, though somewhat reserved, able to chat comfortably with someone she just met. She is quite driven, hoping to become a ninja to equal the nostalgic tales spun by her mother about her late father.
Rank: E
Village: Sand
Fame: 0
Infamy: 0
Title: Genin
Bloodline: None
Element: Taking after her father, she is a Water Element,
Fighting Style: Genjutsu Specialist, Ninjutsu Secondary.
Main/Favored Weapon: Senbon
Starting Inventory:
- 2x Reels Wire, 15ft each, one kept wrapped on her right arm, the other on her left leg
- 6x Shuriken, kept in left hip pouch.
- 2 Kunai, kept in right hip pouch.
- 22 Senbon, 14 in her left hip pouch, 5 in her right, 1 in each of her socks, and one in her hair.
- 1x tanto, (12 inch blade) kept in a scabbard on her right leg.
- 3x Smoke bombs, kept in her right hip pouch.
- One small scroll of paper.
- One pencil.
Combat Styles: None.
Special Abilities: None
Jutsu Total: 3/8
Jutsus:
- Henge No Jutsu
- Kawarimi No Jutsu
- Bunshin No Jutsu
Bloodline Limits: None
Bloodline Jutsu: None
Missions Completed:
- D-Rank:0
- C-Rank:0
- B-Rank:0
- A-Rank:0
- S-Rank:0
Background: Background: Erina's mother had, 14 years ago, fell in love with a missing Mist ninja, whom had fled to Suna seeking refuge. The relationship was not to last, with Sand agreeing to extradite the fugitive for a couple of very minor favors. He was sent back to Mist, and there was executed. Soon afterwords her mother discovered she was pregnant. The people of sand were surprisingly kind about the whole affair, helping her mother, whom had little family, and many a neighbor babysat this pale, half mist baby. As a student with affinity for water element, in Suna, famous for its air and earth users, she found scant few teachers, being viewed as something of an oddity. She was quicker then most of her peers, both mentally and physically and, when the opportunity presented itself, she found herself a very strong swimmer, something unheard of in the desert. However she was one of the weaker members of her class, certainly not up for overpowering anyone, and her frame wasn't really stout enough to take many blows, so she lagged in her martial arts. _________________ Only a few find the way, some don't recognize it when they do - some... don't ever want to.
Roleplaying Characters:
Erina Kosetsu
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RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: Village: Fame: 0 Reputation: Training Points: N/A Inventory: Empty
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 8:25 am Post subject: |
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please copy the template directly so you get the format
also you need to pick a fighting style such as, taijustu, ninjutsu, genjutsu, ijutsu, puppetry, or fuuinjutsu.
without a bloodline you can pick from specializing in one, majoring in another.
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majoring in one, and minoring in another _________________ ☪☮€✡¡$✞
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Roleplaying Characters:
Mashimizu Murakami
Kyousha Tanaka
Kazuya Koroshi
Mononoke Youkai
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: S Kumo Jounin ~ E Iwa Genin~ A Genin ~ B (E-Class Missing-Nin) Village: Kumogakure ~ Iwagakure ~ Sunagakure ~ Missing-Nin Fame: 0 Reputation: Training Points: 2910 Inventory: Denryoku; 10x Kunai; 10x Suriken; Samehada Kougake ~ D3; 3x Kunai ~ 10x Kunai; 10x Suriken
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 2:28 pm Post subject: |
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| Shippopotamus wrote: | please copy the template directly so you get the format
also you need to pick a fighting style such as, taijustu, ninjutsu, genjutsu, ijutsu, puppetry, or fuuinjutsu.
without a bloodline you can pick from specializing in one, majoring in another.
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majoring in one, and minoring in another |
And minoring in a third =P So major minor minor in that case
Also, when you copy the coding for the template be sure to put your inventory in the list format so it will go something like:
| Code: | [list]
[*] xx Kunai
[*] xx senbon
[/list] |
This way its easier to see all of what you've got and it'll look a lot snazzier ^^ _________________ 16 Auto-learn jutsu
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10 Jutsu slots
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Roleplaying Characters:
Cielle Ieru
Mao Hazaigo-Toreena
Sunari Kamui
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: A (Chuunin) ~ S (Chuunin) ~ C (Genin) Village: Kumogakure ~ Konohagakure ~ Iwagakure Fame: 263 ~ 455 ~ 517 Reputation: Training Points: 5870 Inventory: 11-12 Smoke Bombs, 15 Kunai, 5 Shuriken, 1 Senbon, and some medical equipment ~ 10 Kunai, 2 Scrolls - puppets (Kaijo/Ambiance/Chrono/Spades), and minor medical supplies ~ 5 Smoke boms, 2 Sai, 5 Shuriken, 2 Kunai, and med supplies
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 5:47 pm Post subject: |
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Those are actually your fighting styles, not combat styles. Also your rank would be "E" since your title is "Genin" _________________ 16 Auto-learn jutsu
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Roleplaying Characters:
Cielle Ieru
Mao Hazaigo-Toreena
Sunari Kamui
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: A (Chuunin) ~ S (Chuunin) ~ C (Genin) Village: Kumogakure ~ Konohagakure ~ Iwagakure Fame: 263 ~ 455 ~ 517 Reputation: Training Points: 5870 Inventory: 11-12 Smoke Bombs, 15 Kunai, 5 Shuriken, 1 Senbon, and some medical equipment ~ 10 Kunai, 2 Scrolls - puppets (Kaijo/Ambiance/Chrono/Spades), and minor medical supplies ~ 5 Smoke boms, 2 Sai, 5 Shuriken, 2 Kunai, and med supplies
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 6:06 pm Post subject: |
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Looks good to me, though since secondary and primary both seem to equal one style point you could probably bump that up...but wait for a staff person to answer if you can I guess.
Otherwise I give my member approval, worth all of 1/5!!! _________________ 16 Auto-learn jutsu
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Roleplaying Characters:
Cielle Ieru
Mao Hazaigo-Toreena
Sunari Kamui
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: A (Chuunin) ~ S (Chuunin) ~ C (Genin) Village: Kumogakure ~ Konohagakure ~ Iwagakure Fame: 263 ~ 455 ~ 517 Reputation: Training Points: 5870 Inventory: 11-12 Smoke Bombs, 15 Kunai, 5 Shuriken, 1 Senbon, and some medical equipment ~ 10 Kunai, 2 Scrolls - puppets (Kaijo/Ambiance/Chrono/Spades), and minor medical supplies ~ 5 Smoke boms, 2 Sai, 5 Shuriken, 2 Kunai, and med supplies
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 6:12 pm Post subject: |
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Besides the minor spelling of Senbon, and world being word, it looks good.
For Cielle: Can't up it to major since that would mean having 2 majors. Has to wait for SS rank or given for that to happen.
PM me if you want those minor spelling errors changed.
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Roleplaying Characters:
Suteki Yaku
Sara
Jin
Kishin Shou
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: D~E~E~E Village: Cloud~Water~Cloud~Fire Fame: 75~0~0~0 Reputation: Training Points: 300~135~0~0~3090 Inventory: 5 bundles of 50 ft Wire, Wire Cutters, 5 bells, 4 Smoke Bombs, 10 Kunai, 40 Senbon, 3 pipes and 1 box of metal/glass, 5 Unknown Scrolls--2 two foot long metal poles, Several sheets of scroll paper, +1 fake scroll A mysterious Egg~~5 Kunia, 2 buster knuckles~~5 kunia and 2 Modified Buster Knuckles
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